5.1 – Second Interim

Today was the second interim critique – below are the posters I submitted.

Updates:

• Got rid of the words in the music shapes as I felt it looked too messy, and it feels more lonely without the words. However, I have decided it looks a little too empty without the words so I may try and write them in Illustrator so that they look neater.
• Changed the illustration of the radio – I felt it was too similar to another illustration of a radio that I used as an artist model.
• Added rule down the bottom.

Things to change:

• Redo radio illustration in illustrator – to make it look cleaner to match the radio noise shapes
• Text is still too big, particularly the age concern website address down the bottom – have it smaller and in line with the paragraph above.
• Text is also too long – cut it down even more.
• Try iterations with and without rule.

Updates:

• I tried to cut down the paragraph text more, and make the line of the text shorter.
• I added the phone number and the website address, and a rule
• Made all text smaller

Things to change:

• Different scales, different iterations with text moved around

Try many different iterations, rearranging things – as not much has changed from my original posters from a few weeks ago, and I feel like I need to push them further.